society's beauty.
people are no longer hungry for food ; they're hungry for how good skinny girls look in a bikini. hungry for the feeling of feeling tiny beneath a sweatshirt. hungry for feeling safe without sucking in while wearing a tank top. hungry for bony collar and shoulder bones. hungry for that light-as-a-feather feeling when being picked up. hungry for skinny legs, thigh gaps, and a flat stomach.
hungry for the taste of satisfaction. hungry for the taste of catharsis. hungry for acceptance in a delusional society.
hungry will forever remain unquenched to those who cannot attain.
this is the hunger that starves the living, and feeds the graves.
the last line of your poem is really intriguing. I like the way you added the grave part.
ReplyDeletethe only thing I noticed was:
"hungry for the feeling safe without sucking in while wearing a tank top."
do you mean, "hungry for feeling safe..."
I think you have an extra 'the'
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ReplyDeleteWonderful Olivia! I loved the repetition of sentence structure, and your last sentence was hauntingly beautiful and honest. An interesting perception.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing that I noticed was at the beginning, "People are no longer hungry for food. they're hungry for how good skinny girls look in a bikini." I think that it would be better if you combined the two with a semicolon or maybe --people are no longer hungry for food BUT for how good skinny girls look in a bikini. ?
All the rest of the sentences are great but these two were just too fragmenty. (is that a word? it is now)
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ReplyDeleteWow! Powerful, topical and important writing here, Olivia.
ReplyDeleteJust put a comma in front of "but" or you could use a semi colon instead of the but.
Love it, love it, love it!