everything
he set everything on fire
his world up in flames
then he flicked his lighter
now my heart has
third degree burns
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he was a pyromaniac;
everything
he set everything on fire;
his world up in flames.
then he flicked his lighter
now my heart has
third degree burns
VERY nice poem; tons of cool imagery within it!
ReplyDeleteWhat I might do to give it a little more pazaaz is add some punctuation.
For example adding a semi colon after the first line, and another at the end of the third line. A Period at the end of the fourth...
Just a suggestion. :)
I really enjoyed reading your poem Olivia! You're wrong! Your poetry is great!!! I love how you moved the words around!. I agree with Katarina, some punctuation may give it a final touch as well as your imagery is amazing! You should be really proud of this Liv!
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