when i sit and think about writing,
i think about how nice it would be
if i could write like the other poets
because i know
i think about how nice it would be
if i could write like the other poets
because i know
there will be lots of submissions
that exercise an ample employment of diction
And those of which are perfectly punctuated.
and induce a kaleidoscope of vivacious pigments, that ignite
a wildfire of imagery
a wildfire of imagery
but
that’s all really not my thing
so i’ll sit and just think about it
When I read this, I laughed. The last line just seems so you that I can picture you saying it. I love your writing, it always inspires me. So I definatly think that you should enter this poem (or another) into the writing contest. It would be funny though if you entered this one.
ReplyDeleteYou probabaly meant to do this, but I thought I'd mention it anyways. The period at the end of line 7 is off. But it works perfectly for the poem, so I wouldn't change it.
In the beginning, when you write "...lots of submission", I would change the placement of some of the lines around it, because it seems to halt a little too much. Is that clearish? Maybe bring the next line up a line?
And the fifth last line, instead of "that ingnite" I would change it to "igniting", becuase you seem to have one too many "that's".
:) Lovelovelove. Would it be wrong to comment on the poem above as well? :P